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Task 2 (40 min) Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. write at least 250 words.

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In my opinion living in an
appartent
a suite of rooms usually on one floor of an apartment house
apartment
 has lots of benefits for the people who
especilly
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 are living in the industrial cities. They may have more home security against the thieves, they have more chance to
communicat
transmit information
communicate
 with their
neighbers
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 who living in a same building.
they
Suggestion
They
 can share water, gas
,
Accept space
,
elevator monthly charge and
electericity
a physical phenomenon associated with stationary or moving electrons and protons
electricity
 bills. But living in an
appartment
a suite of rooms usually on one floor of an apartment house
apartment
apartments
 has
also
Linking Words
 a lot of disadvantages. Just
imagin
form a mental image of something that is not present or that is not the case
imagine
 that you
has sitting
Suggestion
were sitting
 on a couch
an
located at or attached to
on
 your
neighbors
Suggestion
neighbour
neighbours
 started to
yelling
Suggestion
yell
 and
trowing
propel through the air
throwing
 their stuff around, or maybe
your
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
 upstairs
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 hold a party in the midnight while you are trying to sleep. In my opinion, I
recommand
push for something
recommend
recommended
 to the families, who has young
childeren
a young person of either sex
children
, should live in a house. In the view of the fact that it can affect on the
childeren
Suggestion
children's
children
child's
child
 mental health, their life
safty
the state of being certain that adverse effects will not be caused by some agent under defined conditions
safety
.
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