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Some people tend to take temparay jobs (they only work for few months of years )for they have time to do other things. Do you the advantage outweigh disadvantages.

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Working, spending and saving are important activities of our life. Gone are the days, when people used to stay at a single
job
 for whole life. Whereas nowadays,
job
 hopping has  trended among masses. It is a highly debatable whether preference is using giving two temporary jobs by few individuals
this
 essay will argue that the advantages of
this
 outweigh the drawbacks.
To begin
 with, there are some advantages of to do part time
work
.
Firstly
, individual gets a chance different
work
, not only in single company but
also
 in different organisations.
Consequently
, people can gain experience in distinct working fields.
Secondly
, since when people will change
job
 one to another place, individual may be not feeling burden to their
work
.
As a result
, people will give the sense of satisfaction from
work
.
Moreover
, if a
person
 changes their
job
,
then
 the
work
 area does not change, but as the
person
 may have to change resident that's reason social and professional network are expanding to people. Despite having several advantages, there are few demerits of take temporary jobs. One approach is no
job
 security. A good illustration is that temporary
job
 a
person
 hired at some period of time. After complete
work
 of company. A
person
 may fire in the organisation. As it cause people can suffer from a financial problem. Another approach is, temporary worker does not get extra benefits
such
 as promotions, perks and many more. To sum up, it can be concluded that temporary employee offers lots of benefits to people as compare to regular
job
 despite will some advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
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