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Nowadays, obesity is increasing in a rapid pace. The reasons of it and how to tackle this issue

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It
is unfortunate fact that
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is an unfortunate fact that
obesity
 has always been one of the most widespread illnesses. Nowadays the issue of overweight has become as actual as it has never been before leading to
hard
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harder
 and sometimes lethal outcome. I consider the main causes of
such
 lamentable trend are consuming too much unhealthy
food
 as well as having
sedentary lifestyle
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a sedentary lifestyle
. It apparently affects on people’s digestion system and
also
 reflects on appearance.
First
 of all, one reason why the majority of
world’s population
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the world’s population
 today meets problems with weight is eating free from points. Adults as well as children in many countries got accustomed to eating enormous amounts of junk
food
. Due to
wide range
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a wide range
 of meals available to eat out people rarely cook at home and prefer fast, tasty and affordable
food
. Another factor of getting overweight is leading confining style of living.
Mostly
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Most
 people today are involved
into
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in
 office jobs and even in leisure time majority prefer sitting in front of a computer rather than having a walk, not mentioning doing sports. These are the most outstanding reasons of
obesity
 among people of all ages. One of the common consequences of getting overweight is nutritional disorder. It is no wonder that diseases
such
 as gastritis and gastric ulcer have become extremely widespread for
last
 two decades. Fast
food
 contains
high concentration
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a high concentration
 of fat, chemicals and spices, all of which harden the digestion process, leading in the future to chronic problems with health.
Furthermore
,
obesity
 directly reflects
people’s exterior
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the people’s exterior
 and
consequently
 their position in the society. Overweight people usually suffer from several complexes due to the unattractiveness of their body which make their social life complicated. These are the examples of bad influence of
obesity
 on majority’s health as well as
on
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in
 social life. To sum up, the main causes of overweight are mainly unhealthy habits
such
 as eating junk
food
 and being inactive, which are usually followed by digestion disorders as well as having uninviting appearance.
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