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IN the modern , globalised world, traditional colours associated with clothing,festivals and cultural symbols have lost thier meaning. it is no longer necessary to pay attention to colour in these areas

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I am completely agreed for forgetting our culture. Due to westernization we are accepting everything from western countries blindly. There is a lot d
ifference
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different
between clothing sense of western’s and o
ur.
things belonging to us
ours
ourselves
us
 But we have not forgotten w
earing
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to wear
our traditional dresses. We h
as just deduce
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have just deduced
the time of wearing. Our traditional dresses are world famous because of its
colour
 used, designs, material, and many more. Many Traditional d
resses
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dress
c
olour
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colours
are made by Indigo and it was only available in India during reign of B
ritish.
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the British
 And that made more importance to traditional dresses and
colour
 today. Clothing senses decide our festivals and culture. Like
for example
 Navatri {Nine nights} is the best for describing or apparently
this
 festival is
also
 known for its special dresses. Like B
andhi
daughter of Nehru who served as prime minister of India from 1966 to 1977 (1917-1984)
Gandhi
for female and k
adiyu
for male.
Similarly
, it’s impossible to imagine Indian cultural symbols without
such
 traditional dresses and it’s
colour
 as red, blue, green, black, etc. One can find these colours on many Indian g
od
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gods
and goddess. Our Indian national flag m
ay be change but
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may change, but
may change but
cultural symbol and its colours r
emains
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remain
untouched. As a matter of fact, colours have a special meaning, when it comes to cultures, nations, states. I
ts
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It
is the symbolism and
therefore
 it is pristine.
Colour
 is w
ay
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a way
to construct the necessary atmosphere and mood. Warm colours help to get rest and relax at home when a cool, simple scheme in the office allows people to focus better.
Colour
 is a language
that is
 clear for people in the world and from my point of view; it is becoming more and more important in the era of globalization and westernization.
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