Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices

Nowadays, people have many choices. From
transportation
and education. New choices came out because
technology
has improved and became better than before.
Technology
on
this
day, is really awesome and very different from the past.
Technology
on
this
day makes our life easier and
also
advanced
technology
makes our job finish faster than we finish it without
technology
.
For example
, in the
past we
Accept comma addition
past, we
used to get information and news from books and newspaper. But now, people rarely look for information from books because it’s more complicated than we look up on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
or google. And
also
,
technology
makes our life is simpler than before.
For example
, in
transportation
side, if we don’t have much time to drive our car, we can easily
order
online
transportation
. In Indonesia, many people use online
transportation
because it is more convenient and it’s cheaper than we
order
offline
transportation
.
Also
, they
order
their meal through their mobile phone. So, the store has provided their own application for people who want to
order
their menu and after the buyer
order
their meal, they will deliver the meal suitable as their address. For online
transportation
again, for ordering their clothes. During quarantine, so many people
order
their clothes through online. Because, so many clothes store has closed. And
also
, the price is cheaper than we buy it at
offline store
Suggestion
offline stores
an offline store
. And for the education side, during quarantine, we can’t go to school like usual. Because we have to stay at home for preventing the spread of
corona virus
Suggestion
the corona virus
. So, we still have school, but we do it by online. We use zoom for meeting each other and for studying. We do our exam through google forms. The point is, if we have so many choices, I think it’s alright. As long we use it for the good things.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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