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The best way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organization. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that working in an international organization is
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 of the best
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 of becoming aware of different
cultures
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 from all around the world. I partially agree with
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 point of view.
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 a job can help in understanding other nations and
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 will represent other
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 of cultural exchange. On the
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 hand,
people
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 who work in multinational companies frequently communicate with their coworkers from all parts of the world. During
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 communication they can better understand
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 from other countries, they may exchange cultural
experience
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experiences
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 with them,
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and become
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 aware of national customs, holidays, and traditions.
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, all nations have their special holidays and celebrations, and,
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 working together,
people
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 tell each other about them.
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, work in multinational companies is frequently associated with business trips. During
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trips
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 workers see the foreign life
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in
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 their own eyes. It undoubtedly broadens their horizons and cultural knowledge.
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, there are numerous
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 of learning new
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 except working in
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 multinational company. We can get
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 important knowledge from books or on the internet. Modern technologies allow
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us to
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 get cultural information we are interested in in a few seconds.
People
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 interested in
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 topics can become
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members of social media communities,
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, who are communicating about different customs or traditions.
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, we all have an opportunity to travel during our free time.
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 industry is
well developed
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 in the modern world, and travelling is
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 of the best
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 to understand different
people
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 and
cultures
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.
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,
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 of the best
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 to understand different
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 and
cultures
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 is
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 a part of
international
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an international
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 organization.
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, we
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 have an opportunity to travel or to get knowledge about different
cultures
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 from books or on the internet.
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