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The best way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organization. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that working in an international organization is
one
 of the best
ways
 of becoming aware of different
cultures
 from all around the world. I partially agree with
this
 point of view.
This
 essay will describe the reasons why
such
 a job can help in understanding other nations and
then
 will represent other
ways
 of cultural exchange. On the
one
 hand,
people
 who work in multinational companies frequently communicate with their coworkers from all parts of the world. During
this
 communication they can better understand
people
 from other countries, they may exchange cultural
experience
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experiences
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 with them,
become
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and become
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 aware of national customs, holidays, and traditions.
For example
, all nations have their special holidays and celebrations, and,
while
 working together,
people
 tell each other about them.
Moreover
, work in multinational companies is frequently associated with business trips. During
such
trips
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trips,
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 workers see the foreign life
on
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in
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 their own eyes. It undoubtedly broadens their horizons and cultural knowledge.
On the other hand
, there are numerous
ways
 of learning new
cultures
 except working in
the
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a
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 multinational company. We can get
this
 important knowledge from books or on the internet. Modern technologies allow
to
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us to
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 get cultural information we are interested in in a few seconds.
People
 interested in
such
 topics can become
the
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members of social media communities,
for instance
, who are communicating about different customs or traditions.
Furthermore
, we all have an opportunity to travel during our free time.
Travel
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The travel
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 industry is
well developed
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well-developed
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 in the modern world, and travelling is
one
 of the best
ways
 to understand different
people
 and
cultures
.
To sum up
,
one
 of the best
ways
 to understand different
people
 and
cultures
 is
being
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by being
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 a part of
international
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an international
the international
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 organization.
However
, we
also
 have an opportunity to travel or to get knowledge about different
cultures
 from books or on the internet.
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