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Many animals are being hunted to the brink of extinction in order to fulfill the demand and greed of mankind for decorative purposes as well as for other reasons, such as traditional medicine. How can this issue be tackled?

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Many people hunt animals to satisfy their greed and sometimes for medicinal purpose as well, but unfortunately the excessive hunting and poaching leads to the extinction of many wild animals and many more are on the verge of extinction. The disappearance of animals can imbalance the ecosystem,
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 it is imperative to put a stop to
this
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 mindless action of humans. The hunting of animals for ornamental purpose is
such
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 an inhumane act, so there are some possible solutions to deal with
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 problem.
Firstly
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, the
government
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 should run some awareness campaign. So that people should know the importance of animals in our environment.
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, according to a report,
overhunting
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 always result in overpopulation of one species which hinders the entire biosphere.
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 why,
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government
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the government
 should enact some stringent laws to stop
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 activity.
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, the animals should
kept
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keep
 in
santuries
a period of 100 years
centuries
, away from human activities where they can live freely. It
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can also help
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 helps in raising the number of endangered species. Taking
for instance
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, tigers in India were saved from the edge of distinction by keeping them in
santuries
a consecrated place where sacred objects are kept
sanctuaries
.
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, the
government
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 can take effective measures to save animals. The supporters of animal hunting for medicinal use argue that the traditional medicines are much more useful than others.
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, it has proven that there are several alternative medicines to the traditional ones which are as much effective as the others.
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 the killing of animals for medicinal use is not a wise idea. The ban on traditional medicine is not a viable solution, but
government
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 can ban the killing of animals for
medicine
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medical
 manufacturing with strict laws.
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 would help to keep animals away from poachers. In conclusion, hunting should be banned to save animal species from extinction. The
government
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 can effectively participate to address the issue by introducing various laws and regulations along with awareness programs.
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