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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

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Opinions are divided as to whether or not people should share as much
information
 in some major as they can or charge some significant and privacy data. I personally supposed that there is some
information
 that should be charged due to its value. On the one hand, people support sharing knowledge in scientific research, business and academic world for some reason.
First
 of all, publicizing advice may help people to improve their awareness about many aspects. To be more precise, a successful businessman named Pham Thanh Hung often shares experience of the other,
as a result
, many startups can follow in his footsteps and become successful in business.
Otherwise
, sharing is the way that people can exchange their intelligence to the other, it helps to create an active environment.
For instance
, in some school, teachers must gain the ideas from their students and give feedbacks
instead
 of applying their knowledge only in classes,
therefore
, the lessons become more interesting and it helps to encourage student can develop their own knowledge.
On the other hand
, the advantages that sharing report can bring are undeniable,
however
, I would argue that some crucial and valuable science should be charged. The initial reason is that some pieces of message are priceless because they are discovered after endless efforts and hard work of a person or even a team. Charging a fee can not only show the gratitude for their contribution, but
also
 the enhance of responsibility of the users. As an example, to create an online vocabulary which helps people more convenient to remember the new word, a teacher work hard for hours,
therefore
, it's unfair to share it freely. Some
information
 is too important to be spread.
In other words
, the instruction of nuclear weapons is leaked, many terrorists and criminals would use it illegally. In conclusion,
although
 some people willing to share instruction freely, I strongly believe that some
information
 should not be shared because of its valuable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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