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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with that statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
There are several reasons why printed
books
 and newspapers will maintain their appeal, one of which is that digital
books
 on the internet will be outdated. In fact,
according to
 copyright regulations worldwide, only after 60 years of a writer's death can their
books
 be published on the internet or other book websites, so readers cannot find the latest updates of
books
 that they need in the digital format.
This
 limitation will increase the value of printed
books
 which provide current information for readers.
In addition
, physical
books
 or newspapers are less damaging to our vision compared to digital ones. Some individuals are particularly sensitive to the blue light emitting from cutting-edge devices, increasing the risk of vision issues in the long term. These
people
 often prefer to read physical
books
 or
books
 in them, so
this
 preference for printed materials increases the likelihood of continuing popularity of printed material. For illustration, a lot of research has shown that
people
 reading novels online on their laptops are at risk of eyesight problems more than those reading physical ones.
While
 some
people
 believe digital
books
 are under one roof which means
people
 can read them whenever they want without spending too much time to find them in the library, somewhere like Africa is not advanced with high-quality internet connection, so
people
 need to buy some
books
 In conclusion, from my point of view not only do digital
books
 and newspapers impose eye issues on
people
 but they
also
 do not satisfy
people
 because of being old-fashioned, so they will keep their popularity in the future.
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clarity
'Readers cannot find the latest updates of books that they need in the digital format.' can be more clear by specifying 'latest releases of popular authors...' or a similar clarification.
relevance
Strengthen the argument about the copyright limitation by adding more specific or varied examples.
structure
The third paragraph could benefit from a more robust concluding sentence or a clearer link back to the main topic to enhance coherence.
content
The essay offers good reflections on both the longevity of printed books due to copyright limitations and the impact of digital reading on vision.
structure
Good structure with clear paragraphs focusing on different points.
content
The concluding statement succinctly reaffirms the stance of the essay and ties back to the points made.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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