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Around the worldit is likely that more adualts will work from home, and more children will study from home, as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this will be a positive or negative development.

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Nowadays all over the world use
computer
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technology
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 to work at home and children will study at home because it is easy to
access
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. I think
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 development will have a negative impact.
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, I think if children learn to use
computer
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technology
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 more easily because through the
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computer internet
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computer, internet
 network children can expand their learning
access
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. So that they can understand more about the knowledge of their learning and broader their thinking.
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, it turns out if seen in reality children spend more time by accessing social media to chat with their friends.
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, they will not concentrate on their learning and only waste time on things that are not important. And one of the other impacts, they will tend to be less socializing with their surroundings.
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, I think the opportunity to work from home by relying on
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 to
computer
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technology
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 can benefit employees and bosses. Using
computer
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technology
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, employees and bosses can solve problems by discussing through chat
media with others and
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and media with others
 can reduce travel time to the meeting place. The company owners can
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 save on electricity costs used for computers in the company and other maintenance costs for the company.
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,
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 makes many employees more lazy to finish their jobs quickly and the costs for electricity and internet
access
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 will be more

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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