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International travelling is becoming cheaper and more countries are opening doors to increase the number of tourist. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this

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Worldwide tourists destinations are increasing in popularity. Global travelling is getting less expensive and more countries
are granting
Suggestion
are granted
 access to ramp up the percentage of
tourism
.
This
 essay will give the advantages and
disdvantages
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
 of the developed
phenominal
of or relating to a phenomenon
phenomenal
. As seen in the UAE, one of the major
source
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sources
 of revenue for the country apart from oil is
tourism
. The emirates
has been
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have been
 able to building up a wide
vareity
a collection containing a variety of sorts of things
variety
verity
 of different travel destinations for people all over the country, which in return has ghastly increased the economy of the nation. Tourists would spend money on food, transportation, cultural experiences and many other
activites
any specific behavior
activities
 during their stay which in return would boost the economy of the nation. International travelling creates allies within nations by acknowledging passports and granting visa on arrival. Countries that
encourages
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encourage
 visa on arrival for various nationalities records more travelling success than others.
In contrast
, some countries that expect most of their revenues from
tourism
 can be met with a blow
such
 as the
coronavirus
relating to or characteristic of carnivores
carnivorous
, where movement is restricted more frankly international travelling.
This
 would cause a drastic reduction in the fund generation through
tourism
.
However
, international travelling causes
damages
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damage
 to the environment majorly through emission of gases by various means of transportations
such
 as aeroplanes, helicopters, buses and so on. In conclusion, worldwide travelling if regulated and monitored strictly can cause more good that damage to nations that allow travellers to explore the beauty of their countries.
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