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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.
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The given bar chart compares the number of social networking
sites
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 visited by internet
users
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 in Canada over the span of two years from 2014 to 2015.
It is clear that
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 from the data, in general, the percentage of the Canadian people who did not use social media or used only one social networking site decreased slightly over the given period,
while
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 the figure for Canadian people who used more than two
sites
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 went up minimally. The percentage of internet
users
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 who did not use any social networking
sites
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 slightly fell from 22% in 2014 to 21% after one year. In both years the highest proportion of
users
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 "One site" category declined sharply from just over one-
third
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 in 2014 to 28%
at the end
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 of the period. In 2014, the numbers who reported using two
sites
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, three
sites
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, four
sites
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, and five
sites
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 made up 23%, 12 %, 5%,
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% respectively.
However
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, after a year all categories grew significantly namely the number of people using three
sites
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 increased by 4% in 2015, which constituted 16%, four
sites
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 slightly increased in 2015 making only 8% and
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the fiver
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fiver
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five
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 site's
users
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 are negligible changed and remain 4 %.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sites, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart overview
  • social networking sites
  • trends
  • adoption
  • comparison
  • significant changes
  • segment
  • growth or reduction
  • social media habits
  • patterns
  • multi-platform usage
  • decline
  • non-users
  • conclusion
  • digital communication
  • social media marketing
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