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Countries should spend money on trains rather than new roads. Do you agree or disagree

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? In the recent days, it has become essential to enhancements in the usage in trains
instead
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a major road for any form of motor transport
highway
y roads. I completely agree with that the governments should
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consume
d money in
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developing
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training
s and metro rather than
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on
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Firstly
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, the trains
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more conveniently
t comparing by roads means and safer for all people. In these days, the number of increase population
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e a dilemma among the world,
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 it is crucial to
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better solutio
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a better solution
n in order to reduce those issues one of the solution is use and enhance in metros and trains.
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, commuting for daily
work
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 trips may
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obtain by purchase; acquire by means of a financial transaction
buy
y cars may be
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causing
e traffic congestion and using the trains and metro is better for both the employees and the
work
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productivit
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produced
y. Trains
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have been
were
n easily in consuming everyday
work
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 for
work
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 outcome.
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, the most vital usage of trains and metros are protecting the environment from the emission of use many cars and buses in the city or the
high way
a major road for any form of motor transport
highways
s.
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the modern era
a, the cars have increase and develop rapidly and
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 makes a lot of harm for our plant. The reducing in using
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a different way
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n the production of transportation emission and for that reduce the carbon dioxide. The vehicle exhaust might be made health disease.
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, if it affordable for everyone to use the cars
instead
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 of using the metros and the trains in crowded city
such
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 as Cairo it will be a disaster for the citizen health and
further
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 for the county. In conclusion, I strongly with the increase of trains and metro
instead
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 of the cars and buses in the roads
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • carbon emissions
  • environmentally-friendly
  • traffic congestion
  • public transport
  • urban hubs
  • economic development
  • mass transit solutions
  • efficient transportation
  • cargo demand
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