Everyone of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Meat is a controversial topic and
whole world
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the whole world
is divided in two categories where one are the supporters and other oppose it to eliminate from
food chain
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the food chain
. Slaughtering other species to calm tastebuds of
tongue
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the tongue
tongues
is
a
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an
endless desire which is not a solution when other options are available in the market.
However
, to some extent a portion of
non vegetarian community
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the non vegetarian community
is quintessential to tackle
food
supplies as animals become
inseprable
not capable of being separated
inseparable
part of human diet. I partially agree with the statement as promoting
vegetarian agenda
Suggestion
a vegetarian agenda
would lead to
food
shortage on the
planet but
Accept comma addition
planet, but
undoubtedly animal eaters are bringing new non curable diseases in origin which found in animals. Needless to say, Other species have
lot
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lots
of viruses and pathogens in their bodies and different genetic order. Sometimes these viruses mutate with human viruses which leads to
serious deadly panedemics
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the serious, deadly pandemic
the serious deadly pandemic
serious deadly pandemic
a serious deadly pandemic
serious deadly pandemics
as it happens on
mircoscopic level
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a microscopic level
microscopic level
the microscopic level
and
cann't
can not
can't
cannot
be seen by
naked eye
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the naked eye
.
For Instance
, In the nineteenth century, The World suffers from
plague
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the plague
a plague
and put almost 25 million people to sleep
permanentely
for a long time without essential change
permanently
with
lot
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a lot
lots
of pain in miserable conditions. The above fact is efficient enough to prove the hazardous consequences of consuming other living things.
On the contrary
, Meat is the all and end all
element
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elements
of
food
supplies so it should not be
eliminate
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eliminated
from the
food
chain as almost 40% people of
earth
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the earth
eat it on
daily basis
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a daily basis
. The most important reason which
tremendously
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tremendous
force
this
is without the meat,
whole world
Suggestion
the whole world
would face hunger and become dependent on vegetation completely. To illustrate
this
, if meat is eliminated and everyone should become vegetarian
then
this
will bring malnutrition as only the rich people and developed countries would be able to feed themselves. To conclude, Non-vegetarians are playing vital role in maintaining
food
production and preventing shortage of eatables. To recapitulate, I would like to say that some portion of
scoiety
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
where no other option is available to feed their belly, killing animals is need of
time but
Accept comma addition
time, but
where sufficient resources are available in ample amount and they are
affulent
having an abundant supply of money or possessions of value
affluent
effluent
to meet both ends of life,
this
should be avoided at any cost. Unnecessary fishing and murdering other species for the sake of foolish desires is the biggest stupidity of mankind. In one line, We can say "Be live and let live".
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