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today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. discuss this view and give your own opinion

#teenagers #lives #generations
Recently, there have been many problems which impact on
teenagers
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teenagers'
 lives. I agreed that today’s teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations because of these reasons.
Firstly
, the main reason why I believe it causes a stressful life is academic problem. Competitions and grades are the direct factors made parents required their kid learning and learning. After school, students have to study at another class without free time to play with their friends and do their favourite sports.
Besides
, children are driven by the desire to achieve high grades to reach their dream or their parents’s dream university.
For example
, my younger brother has to do homework
at
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on
for
 the evening day by day. All most of teenagers are the same as my brother, they don’t have time to play
out side
beyond the boundary of; external to
outside
, playing with friend in their
freetime
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free time
 is difficult.
Secondly
, over using social media is
also
 an important reason which makes teenagers more and more stressful.
Sufting
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Shifting
Sifting
Soften
 internet website
such
 as Facebook,
youtube
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YouTube
,..
in
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In
 their
freetime
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free time
 makes
children strangers
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children, strangers
 about real lives and sometimes they
also
 feel difficult to talking doesn’t help teenager relax and
opend
cause to open or to become open
open
opened
 mind, it makes them more stress than going out with friend like previous generations used to. In
conclussion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, I believe that today, teenagers’ lives are more stressful than previous generations.
Instead
 of spending time stay at home to search useless things, teenagers should take part in other outside activity after school to relax.
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