It is often said that retirement is the happiest time of a person’s life. How far do you agree with this view?

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A person plans and saves for his after

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life

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throughout his living.

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detected by instinct or inference rather than by recognized perceptual cues

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that retirement is the blossom period of one's

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is considered as enjoyment and rest period in man's

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after his long

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journey. Everyone has a fantasy to enjoy their lives with their

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generation and family after a certain age. A study by human psychology department of Oxford university states that when an individual gets his wonder space through his retire living, his healthy

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span increases by 5 years. I have personally seen changes in my father after his retirement, which I never observed when he was working, albeit, he is more energetic and lively as he is enjoying with his family and friends. Having said that,

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and after

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of people. To recapitulate, having mulled over above information and

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

371 words

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It is often said that retirement is the happiest time of a person’s life. How far do you agree with this view?

Include an introduction and conclusion

it is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife while there are other problems that are more important. Do you agree or disagree?

Write a 300 to 500-word ‘end of project’ letter to your client

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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.