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Some people say in all levels of English from primary schools to universities tomuch time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #levels #english #schools #universities #tomuch #time #facts #skills
Nowadays
education
 in Russia is stuck with an existential problem about
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 of practical skills in
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 with theoretical knowledge. Having studied
in
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 university, I cannot ignore the fact that I felt
lack
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 of practical experience
,
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 when I started my career. But, as for me, both sides of
education
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 process are important
,
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 and should be given in balance.
It’s
 true that
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theoretical
education
 is a basement of
the
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real knowledge. Working hard, sometimes you cannot pay
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proper attention to self-
education
, and you have to waste more and more time to, like Alice in Wonderland, just staying
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 place.
As a result
, you might miss some well-known facts.
Moreover
, sometimes
it’s
 difficult to achieve a strong and systematic point of view for a curious problem,
while
 teachers from primary schools up to university could provide you with a working model of the issue structure, which, possibly, is applicable to
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 that. Unfortunately,
it’s
 difficult
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 with the fact, that
education
 in Russia struggles with challenging problems. From my point of
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view,
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 the major one relates
with
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to
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 teachers. Sometimes, the teachers don’t know about modern changes in science.
Although
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theoretical
education
 is important,
the
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education
 without
practical
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practicality
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 is like a car’s engine without wheels,
it’s
 useless.
Furthermore
, having worked
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“in a field” for
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 or two in
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parallel
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 university,
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the student
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student
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students
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 can get practical wisdom
in addition
 to theoretical skills. To summarize, both
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the practical
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 and theoretical
side
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 of
education
 are important.
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one
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the one
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 hand, good theory allows you to distinguish a correct solution when you don’t have
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experience. But
in
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other
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the other
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 hand, sometimes you can waste a month to resolve an issue, which has been solved
dozen
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 and dozen times by
another
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other
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 people. Only
having
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 both knowledge and skills, you can achieve
a
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seniority in your sphere of interest.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • practical application
  • memorizing facts
  • understanding
  • apply knowledge
  • job market
  • rote memorization
  • experiential learning
  • creativity
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving abilities
  • practical-focused curriculum
  • foundational knowledge
  • deeper understanding
  • innovation
  • diverse learning styles
  • educational system
  • adapt
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