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Today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion

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In these days, there are communities who furnish our book rooms with technologies and they think without books
youngers
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
 can learn new things more with hi-tech
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
. Librarians intension is supplying our
bibliothecas
 with interesting books and they want people who contribute studios with technologies they should not focus on to
this
. There are two types of humans who think about it different opinions. So, in
this
essay it
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essay, it
 will be discussed both of these concepts. On the one hand, in
there
of them or themselves
their
 publics who agree with
this
 view. They consider that our younger generations can know more news
from
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about
 books without any hi-tech
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
. So, they want if humans have more money for
provide
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providing
 libraries with computers,
this
 kind of people can equip the books which we can get more
informations
a message received and understood
information
 than videos and DVDs.
On the other hand
, in despite of these views there are
second type
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the second type
a second type
 of communities who imagine the opposite side of
former people's idea
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the former people's idea
. So, they suppose that it is not bad, if there are technologies with useful books. Because, in
there
of them or themselves
their
 pupils who want to study or work with computers.
Also
, it is more comfortable and easier find
datas
a collection of facts from which conclusions may be drawn
data
dates
details
 from hi-tech
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 than books and you use
from
Suggestion
of
 your time efficiently. To sum up, more humans view that if people want to learn something
seriously they
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seriously, they
 know it without hi-tech
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
medals
Midas
 and others consider that we need technologies in our public libraries. From my point of view, former public's opinion is true. Because of, we go to the book rooms to read a book. If we want to find
datas
a collection of facts from which conclusions may be drawn
data
dates
 from
computer it
Suggestion
computer, it
the computer it
the computer the computer it
 all have in our
rooms
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room
.
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