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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (Cambridge Test IELTS 13 Academic - TEST 1 - Writing Task 1)

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (Cambridge Test IELTS 13 Academic - TEST 1 - Writing Task 1)
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two
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which
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illustrated how the gateway to go
to
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CITY
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 HOSPITAL
has
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changed
on
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in
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 2007 and 2010.
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, there were some changes in
term
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terms
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 of
structure
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the structure
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 of the
road
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, which affected
to
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parking and bus station locations. First of all, the parking has separated from
one
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to
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into
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two
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 types
on
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in
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 2010 –
one
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 was located at
junction
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the junction
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 between
City
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Road
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 and Hospital
Road
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, which is designed for
staffs’
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staffs
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 vehicles only,
the
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and the
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 other
on
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one
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 was on Ring
Road
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that
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next
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 to
City
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 Hospital, which was specialized for public needs. There was a gateway at each parking that was directly to lead to hospital,
one
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 was on the West and another was North of
Public
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the Public
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 car park and
Staff
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the Staff
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 car park respectively. What is more, in
term
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terms
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 of
bus
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the bus
a bus
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 station,
it
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was arranged along
two
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 sides of
Hospital
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the Hospital
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road
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 in 2007.
However
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, in 2010, the structure of
this
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 kind
transportation
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of transportation
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 was relocated and merged to
one
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 spot only on the West of Hospital
Road
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, which was opposite to Staff car park.
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, there are
two
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 roundabouts was created at
junctions
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the junctions
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 of Hospital
Road
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 with
City
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Road
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 and Ring
Road
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also
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.
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, the size and structure of
hospital
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the hospital
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was
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 kept the same. The major changes were designed to increase the quantity of parking, the position of
bus
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the bus
a bus
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 station and
addition
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the addition
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 of
two
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 roundabouts.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, city, road, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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