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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Nuclear
energy
 is most economical and
cleanest
Suggestion
the cleanest
 way to produce
power
. Sometimes it is
also
 used as nuclear weapons. The warning of nuclear weapons keeps world peace. Nuclear
energy
 is the cheapest and clean medium to produce
energy
. In my opinion, I disagree that advantages of nuclear technology far outweigh the negative aspects.
To begin
 with,
benefits
Suggestion
the benefits
 of nuclear
energy
 it is very much helpful and useful in
production
Suggestion
the production
 of electricity.
Large
Suggestion
The largest
 amount of electric
power
 is generated by
nuclear
Suggestion
a nuclear power station
power
 station.
Nuclear
Suggestion
The nuclear power generating station
power
 generating station is considered as the most economical
energy
 generating station. By using
small amount
Suggestion
a small amount
 of
nuclear
Suggestion
the nuclear energy large sum
energy
 large sum of electricity is produced without investing large quantity of money. It is
also
 as renewable source of
power
 by using that many non-renewable sources are conserved.
On the other hand
, it has many negative aspects than compare to benefit.
Firstly
, nuclear
energy
 contains
big quantity
Suggestion
a big quantity
 of
uranium which
Accept comma addition
uranium, which
 is not safe for human body.
For example
, nuclear has
radiation which
Accept comma addition
radiation, which
 can be harmful for people and which deteriorate human health.
Secondly
, some nations
also
 use it as a chemical bomb can be called as
nuclear weapon
Suggestion
a nuclear weapon
nuclear weapons
.
For instance
,
Accept space
,
in
year
Suggestion
the year
 1945 American dropped bomb on city Hiroshima-Nagasaki. Where, many of them lost their lives. The impact of that bomb is still
their
in or at that place
there
 and children over there are now seen having disabilities. To conclude, nuclear
energy
 has more disadvantages than compare to advantages and it does not outweigh the benefits.
Hence
,
nuclear
Suggestion
a nuclear energy source
energy
 source should be used by taking precautions and safety measures.
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