Your friend had made a plan for you to see a movie together but you cannot now not join him. You've found another friend who can go instead of you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you cannot go anymore Say who can go instead of you Say why this person is a good person to go with

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Dear Tom, Hi there. I was delighted when I saw your letter containing the invitation to watch a movie in a theatre. I'm thankful to you for that.

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that day I shall go out of the city for business

purpose

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. So, I would not able to join you for a movie. I really feel sorry about

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inconvenience. But, I have an idea that I recently

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with our mutual friend jack and he

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told me that let's make a plan to watch a movie together. I will sure that he would like to join you for a film. I knew

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for a long time and he

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person. You would love his company and he is

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buff person. Yours sincerely, Alex

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firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
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for example
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however
although
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despite

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

132 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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