A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: - describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team - summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts - say how you think the company should spend some mone

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding the recent

dicsussion

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discussion

around whether the

company

needs to invest the available money into financially supporting a local children’s

sports

team

or into arranging open-air concerts. In

this

letter

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I will evaluate both options and advise which option the

company

should choose going forward. The financial support of a local children’s

sports

team

for two years will

psotively

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positively

influence the interest of youth into

sports

ascurrently

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as currently

currently

some

sports

teams are lacking financial resources and

as a

result

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they are obliged to collect money from

team

members to be able to buy required equipment. Having

this

problem resolved will encourage low-income families to

enroll

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enrol

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their children

into

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sports

. Paying for

organisation

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the organisation

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of concerts in

this

particualr

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particular

area will raise the reputation of the

company

, especially if the

company

invites popular rock singers because

this

town is comparatively small and is rarely visited by

populat

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popular

music bands. Considering that there will be two concerts of

this

scale

then

it will have an

enermous

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enormous

impact on promoting the

company

. I would personally advise

to sponsor

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sponsoring

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a local

sports

team

as it will have long term benefits for local people and youth, and will advertise our

company

’s value towards

healthy

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a healthy

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lifestyle. Especially children from families with unstable financial

sitautions

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situations

situation

will obtain

from

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apply

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more equal opportunities to pursue their dreams in

sports

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Yours faithfully,

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Yours sincerely,

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Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

227 words

4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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