A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: - describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team - summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts - say how you think the company should spend some mone

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding the recent

dicsussion

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discussion

around whether the

company

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needs to invest the available money into financially supporting a local children’s

sports

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team

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or into arranging open-air concerts. In

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letter

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I will evaluate both options and advise which option the

company

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should choose going forward. The financial support of a local children’s

sports

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team

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for two years will

psotively

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positively

influence the interest of youth into

sports

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ascurrently

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as currently

currently

some

sports

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teams are lacking financial resources and

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result

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they are obliged to collect money from

team

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members to be able to buy required equipment. Having

this

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problem resolved will encourage low-income families to

enroll

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their children

into

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sports

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. Paying for

organisation

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the organisation

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of concerts in

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particualr

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particular

area will raise the reputation of the

company

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, especially if the

company

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invites popular rock singers because

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town is comparatively small and is rarely visited by

populat

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popular

music bands. Considering that there will be two concerts of

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scale

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it will have an

enermous

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enormous

impact on promoting the

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. I would personally advise

to sponsor

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a local

sports

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team

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as it will have long term benefits for local people and youth, and will advertise our

company

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’s value towards

healthy

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a healthy

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lifestyle. Especially children from families with unstable financial

sitautions

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situations

situation

will obtain

from

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apply

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more equal opportunities to pursue their dreams in

sports

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The Closing

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Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

227 words

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