A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: - describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team - summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts - say how you think the company should spend some mone

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding the recent

dicsussion

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discussion

around whether the

company

needs to invest the available money into financially supporting a local children’s

sports

team

or into arranging open-air concerts. In

this

letter

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I will evaluate both options and advise which option the

company

should choose going forward. The financial support of a local children’s

sports

team

for two years will

psotively

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positively

influence the interest of youth into

sports

ascurrently

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as currently

currently

some

sports

teams are lacking financial resources and

as a

result

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they are obliged to collect money from

team

members to be able to buy required equipment. Having

this

problem resolved will encourage low-income families to

enroll

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enrol

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their children

into

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sports

. Paying for

organisation

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the organisation

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of concerts in

this

particualr

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particular

area will raise the reputation of the

company

, especially if the

company

invites popular rock singers because

this

town is comparatively small and is rarely visited by

populat

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popular

music bands. Considering that there will be two concerts of

this

scale

then

it will have an

enermous

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enormous

impact on promoting the

company

. I would personally advise

to sponsor

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sponsoring

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a local

sports

team

as it will have long term benefits for local people and youth, and will advertise our

company

’s value towards

healthy

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a healthy

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lifestyle. Especially children from families with unstable financial

sitautions

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situations

situation

will obtain

from

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apply

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more equal opportunities to pursue their dreams in

sports

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The Closing

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Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

227 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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