Some people have the same type of job throughout their lifetime, while others prefer to change the type of job they do. Discuss why people choose to do both and give your opinion.

Many persons like to do the same job from the moment when they finish the university.
On the other hand
, there are
also
people who
preferer
like better; value more highly
prefer
to do
different job
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a different job
different jobs
from the begin of their career. In
this
essay I will discuss the viewpoints of both statements and
also
I will give my opinion for
this
background information.
First
of all I am going start arguing about
this
topic with an example of myself. I have finished architecture in 2009. I have worked in public administration, exactly in
sector
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a sector
the sector
that was not related with field that I had
stydied
produced or marked by conscious design or premeditation
studied
. After five years working there I quit. The reason why I left
this
job because I did not feel comfortable and
also
this
was not relate with what I had degree. But why I have stayed so long doing
this
is because the salary is good.
In addition
, to my opinion lot of human keep changing their occupation because they want to find something that maybe in the future is going to be very promising in their career.
Secondly I
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Secondly, I
am going to talk about the
people which
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people, which
maintain the same profession from the
starte
take the first step or steps in carrying out an action
start
state
. The
first
cause maybe is that they feel good what they have
accomplish
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accomplished
untile
up to, before the time
until
now. They feel complete because they have everything what they have
dream
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dreamt
of. Their earnings are so great and they can afford all
facility
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facilities
that they want. Another point is that maybe they are afraid of changes but
also
they are thinking more about their family. To sum up, people want to do both
way
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ways
because they
feel good what
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feel good in what
they choose to do. Maybe some of them were lucky because they
did
produced by a manufacturing process
made
a smart choice at the begin,
although
there are some other people that
does not happen
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do not happen
to be lucky.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Job security
  • Stability
  • Expertise
  • Mastery
  • Career advancement
  • Personal growth
  • Development
  • Acquiring
  • Skills
  • Knowledge
  • Exploring
  • Career paths
  • Opinion
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