Some people think that all the lawbreakers should be taken into the prison, while others believe that there are better alternatives, (for example, doing some work or learning some skills in the community). Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are few people who believe that, who break the law should be punished and send to

jail

, but the other majority thinks that

instead

they should be punished by giving them community

work

. In

this

essay I would like to put my point of view for both side's with relevant examples.

Firstly

, Prison is building for the reason, that who are harmful to our society should be punished. But, if we put all the criminal people in

jail

even if they had done minor

crime

, that will encourage them and turn them into becoming bigger criminals.

For example

, if someone did theft for the

first

time due to helpless and send to

jail

for a long time,

then

it will force him to do big

crime

as he will be interacting with other criminals.

Secondly

, If they are given

second chance

Suggestion

a second chance

then

it's given the opportunity to improve and they will learn their lesson.

Instead

of putting them in prison with other criminal who have done very serious

crime

Accept comma addition

crime, then

then

due to

jail

environment they will turn out like them. So,

instead

they should be punished by giving community

work

For example

, Peoples who did a small

crime

, due to helpless, and they feel they are guilty

then

they should be given

second chance

Suggestion

a second chance

and give social service

work

so later once they finish their punishment

then

they are able to

work

in the field without any regret. To summarize, as every

crime

is not same, the same way every criminal is not same, who want to improve them self they should be given the opportunity. As one person goes to

jail

their future is done for and they won't get good job opportunities and as well as society won't welcome them as they use to be even if they do minor

crime

. But, by giving them the opportunity to do right after their mistake will change that and it will open doors for them in society.

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