Some people think that all the lawbreakers should be taken into the prison, while others believe that there are better alternatives, (for example, doing some work or learning some skills in the community). Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are few people who believe that, who break the law should be punished and send to

jail

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, but the other majority thinks that

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they should be punished by giving them community

work

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. In

this

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essay I would like to put my point of view for both side's with relevant examples.

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, Prison is building for the reason, that who are harmful to our society should be punished. But, if we put all the criminal people in

jail

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even if they had done minor

crime

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, that will encourage them and turn them into becoming bigger criminals.

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, if someone did theft for the

first

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time due to helpless and send to

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for a long time,

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it will force him to do big

crime

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as he will be interacting with other criminals.

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, If they are given

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second chance

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a second chance

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it's given the opportunity to improve and they will learn their lesson.

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of putting them in prison with other criminal who have done very serious

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crime

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crime, then

then

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due to

jail

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environment they will turn out like them. So,

instead

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they should be punished by giving community

work

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, Peoples who did a small

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, due to helpless, and they feel they are guilty

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they should be given

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second chance

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a second chance

and give social service

work

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so later once they finish their punishment

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they are able to

work

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in the field without any regret. To summarize, as every

crime

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is not same, the same way every criminal is not same, who want to improve them self they should be given the opportunity. As one person goes to

jail

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their future is done for and they won't get good job opportunities and as well as society won't welcome them as they use to be even if they do minor

crime

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. But, by giving them the opportunity to do right after their mistake will change that and it will open doors for them in society.

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May 22, 2020

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