Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentence. Other, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People are divided on the issue that whether giving longer prison
punishment
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to the criminals who commit unlawful act is the best way to decline
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a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
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or not, other ways are superior.
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I believe that providing job opportunity and education by the government is the best way to reduce
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. To commence with discussion, with regards
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to giving
prison
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. People believe that it is acceptable for several reasons.
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, they think that it will generate fear among those who think about committing crimes.
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, if culprits are already aware about the
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, they will think twice before committing any kind of
crime
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. To cite an example, in the UAE, if any person commits
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crime
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a crime
, they will get the strict
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.
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, the other people
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scare of community any
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, I do not believe that arguments stand up to scrutiny. There are other
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ways, such
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as providing education facilities and promoting employment to every person,.
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, the only reason for committing
crime
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is that people are less educated and they have not any work to do. Fir example, in Sweden, higher authorities provide free education to everyone and promote more employment option.
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the reason why the alternative ways are better to decline
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. In conclusion,
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some people argue that giving longer prison
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is the best way to reduce
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as it generates fear in public to commit
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, yet I argue that there is sufficient evidence to demonstrate that
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is not the case
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mentioned steps must be taken to reduce the
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