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The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. the table shows the average number of people online each year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparations where relevant.

The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. the table shows the average number of people online each year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparations where relevant.
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The given pie chart provides the percentage of the types of used languages online in 2001. The table illustrates the number of people being online each year and what
this
 figure accounted for
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the global
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population
 from 1997 to 2001. Generally, English was the most popular language that was used
in
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 the net in December
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 2001. The percentage of the world’s
population
 who was online reached
highest
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 in 2000.
To begin
 with, English language users made up 43% of the total, which was approximately 20 times more than Dutch language users. Japanese and Chinese languages occupied the
second
 and
third
 places with figures at 8.9% and 8.8% respectively. German, Spanish, Korean, Italian, French and Portuguese languages made up 27,6% collectively and all of these were lower than 7%. Meanwhile, it can be clear that the number of people online saw a gradual increase year on year during the observed period but it accounted for a small part of
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population
. The highest percentage of
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the global
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 who was online was 60% in August 2000. In the meantime, the highest number of people who were online was 513
millions
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 in August 2001,
made
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 up 8.4
percent
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 of
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the global
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population
.
This
 figure is still 6.6% more than that in November 1997.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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