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It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media rich society. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The 21st century has had modern technology. Media plays an imperative role in society, it has both pros and cause. Due to
use
 of media escape the problem of influence.
First
 of all, mass media had several benefits and many forms
such
 as, the internet, digital newspaper and television.
This
 is providing us entertainment, news, scientific, academic information. In the modern era the
use
 of the internet is increased, because of the media form internet, we know the detail of a relative who lives in another country, students
use
 it for study purpose just as assignment writing, for doing online courses. While Media provides us to
day
 to
day
 news and we have knowledge about the what's going in the world. Whenever, It is helpful to know anything in a
second
.
On the other hand
, the media
also
 have some ill-effects. In the India, sociology and
philosology
 school proved that higher
use
 of media effect on our brain and people influenced by it. If it dissemination wrong information in society people feel terror or pessimistic,
for instance
, a couple months ago in Indian one news spread of television some toxin available in grapefruits
therefore
 the approach effects on farmers. People more rely on the television programs base of
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 pupil don't want to miss favourite shows because of its conduct many health issues
for example
,
Accept space
,
the problem of obesity. In conclude, media play biggest part in the world, and it's required in
day
 to
day
 living, its give us
to
being one more than one
two
 more
freedom
Suggestion
freedoms
 or information of all around the world.
when
Suggestion
When
 it
also
 has some negative
effet
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
effort
affect
 when we attract on the negative aspect its dangerous for us and as well as for society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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