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Band 4.5

‘Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity.’ How far do you share this viewpoint?

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It is often said meaningful to society that all
citizen
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citizens
 should contribute settled amount of their income to charity because there is a large number of those who is in need of a financial support. It seems to me that the sheer cost of living
,
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,
deviating from
intended goal
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the intended goal
 makes
this
 impractical aspiration
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,
no matter how much we might admire the idea. The main obstacle would appear to be the numbers of middle class which cover approximately half of the world population of those who are living on a budget can barely meet their own needs.Especially in developing countries
such
 as Mongolia, the tax burden on workers becomes intolerably high, and
this
 can eventually increase the cost of living
;
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;
thus
 it may be impossible for those
to donate
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donating
 money. A
further
 issue relates to
donee
a native or inhabitant of Denmark
Dane
,
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,
which may not be able to reach the person who the donation are supposed to be received.
This
 means that
accreted
conforming exactly or almost exactly to fact or to a standard or performing with total accuracy
accurate
 money might be intended for building or vanished the midst even perhaps some will be able to evade
,
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,
seem to demonstrate the it
can not
can not
cannot
 be completely implemented.
Admittedly I
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Admittedly, I
 agree with those who argue that contributing to charity is a worthy ambition for a country to have.
However
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,
this
 aspiration suffers significantly when confronted with financial reality. To summarize
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,
it seems that poverty,
probability
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the probability
 of not adhering
are
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is
main cause
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the main cause
 of donating earnings to charity.
However
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,
this
 needs to be supplemented
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
 various types
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,
such
 as donation of blood
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,
organ and old clothing.
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