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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the average Australian household’s usage of
energy
 and the emissions of
greenhouse
gas
 that
results
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 from it respectively. The operations in both graphs are given in percentages.
Overall
,
according to
 the
charts
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 the main
energy
 user in Australian
home
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homes
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 is the heating
while
the
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water heating emits the biggest percentage of
greenhouse
gas
. Only a tiny fraction of
energy
 and
greenhouse
gas
emission
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emissions
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 comes from the cooling operation. It can be clearly seen that Australians use 42% of
energy
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 on heating which results in as less as 15% of
gas
emission
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emissions
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. Water heating utilizes exactly 30% of the
energy
 and releases nearly a
third
 of the
greenhouse
gas
 (32%). The lowest percentage of
energy
 (2%) and
greenhouse
gas
 (3%) accounts for
the
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cooling. The charts show
also
 that refrigeration, other appliances and lighting which utilize roughly a quarter of the
energy
 (7%,15% and 4% respectively) are contributing to exactly
a
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half of the
greenhouse
gas
 emissions (14%, 28% and 8%
accordingly
).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, greenhouse, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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