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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the average Australian household’s usage of
energy
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 and the emissions of
greenhouse
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gas
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 that
results
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 from it respectively. The operations in both graphs are given in percentages.
Overall
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,
according to
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 the
charts
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,charts
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 the main
energy
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 user in Australian
home
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homes
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 is the heating
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the
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water heating emits the biggest percentage of
greenhouse
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gas
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. Only a tiny fraction of
energy
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 and
greenhouse
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gas
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emission
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emissions
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 comes from the cooling operation. It can be clearly seen that Australians use 42% of
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energy
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their energy
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 on heating which results in as less as 15% of
gas
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emission
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emissions
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. Water heating utilizes exactly 30% of the
energy
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 and releases nearly a
third
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 of the
greenhouse
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gas
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 (32%). The lowest percentage of
energy
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 (2%) and
greenhouse
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gas
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 (3%) accounts for
the
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cooling. The charts show
also
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 that refrigeration, other appliances and lighting which utilize roughly a quarter of the
energy
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 (7%,15% and 4% respectively) are contributing to exactly
a
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half of the
greenhouse
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gas
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 emissions (14%, 28% and 8%
accordingly
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).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, greenhouse, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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