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It is often argued that voluntary work should be compulsory for teenagers to get benefits from both the individual and society as a whole. I completely disagree with the opinion and think that we should not force the youths to do unpaid work.

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 of all, I believe that imposing the unpaid
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 on the teenager can cause more burden on them for their studies, which may pit adverse effect on their health too. As we know, there is a lot of syllabus in school;
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, after coming back from school, young ones have to do their homework with numerous assignments and projects at home. Whenever they get leisure time, we should encourage them to utilize that period by doing physical exercise and playing sports;
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, they may become unhealthy.
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, In Canada, the students who are working in stores have been seen showing less progress in studies as compared to those who do not need to
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 why
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 of compelling them to
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, we should be given the time to concentrate on studies to accomplish outstanding grades. At the same time, so do not believe that
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 and teenagers would gain any advantage by doing unpaid
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. It would be unfair for youngsters and
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 do anything without their willingness, as it can lead to resentment amongst young people who would feel that they were being used.
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, it is
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 against our democratic rules of the nation, which would increase the rate if crime in countries.
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, it has been seen that forcefully
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 causes rebellious in youths which put a negative effect on our
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. Currently, nobody is forced to volunteer, and
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 is surely the best system.  To conclude, I strongly believe that volunteer
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 should not be mandatory for teenagers because it badly effects on their education and even on our
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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