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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. Do you agree or disagree?

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I entirely agree that more emphasize is on learning facts rather than learning practical skills from primary schools to universities which needs to be changed. I feel, a person with practical skills will lead to good changes in every aspect and if students spend more time on practical aspect that will bring curiosity in them. In primary schools, students are asked to score good marks in their academics which make them to read or cram the lesson and they forget to pay attention to its practical aspects too. Even teachers are less interested in paying heed to practical skills. Students are learning whatever teachers are teaching them as
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 students are using them just for formality. In recent times, a newspaper published about the performance of the students at LHS university, California. There were 50 out of 70 students who scored good marks in theory (chemistry), but performed very bad at the experiment. A student with good practical skills can help in bringing good changes
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 some changes towards education system, School/colleges should emphasize on practical skills more which lead to development in every aspect.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • education system
  • curriculum
  • factual knowledge
  • practical skills
  • critical thinking
  • problem solving
  • academic achievement
  • real-world application
  • balance
  • integration
  • learning outcomes
  • employment opportunities
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