You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons tp your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experiences. Write at least 250 words.

Competition and
cooprate
work together on a common enterprise of project
co-operate
sound like two different
worlds but
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worlds, but
it both represent an action that
aim
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aims
to finish or pass something. In a learning
enviroment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
,
competitive
Suggestion
competition
is a
way
for children to
impove
to make better
improve
empower
themselves, aim to be best a objective that you can follow. Not because
it
it is
it's
good to compete each
other meaning
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other, meaning
you can do anything to win
that is
the other meaning to teach children when they were
rousy
covered with or consisting of rust
rusty
. As a parent, they want to teach their children a
way
to survive, a
way
to live without hurting others. Competition is the most effective
way
for children to learn as well as cooperate. People say that young one should learn to cooperate is right. Nowadays, modern technology
make
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makes
is making
every thing
all things
everything
easier as well as communicate, socialize even when you become an
adults
Suggestion
adult
it is a vital thing that be taking care of.
That
Suggestion
That's
why children should be taught to cooperate, but not to cooperate in the even though. Both competition and cooperate is important for children to
learn specially
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learn, especially
learn especially
when and where to do it
.
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.
In the future, they will help become
an
Suggestion
a
responsible adults for a better society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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