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n many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#n #places #homes #space #countryside #people
It's irrefutable that with the massive growth of population whole world need more habitant places and shelter for humans
,
Accept space
,
But due to
this
 residential
area
 are getting smaller and many people advised to build
house
Suggestion
a house
houses
 in
remote
Suggestion
a remote area
remote areas
area
,
Accept space
,
where more space available than cities
,
Accept space
,
while others argue that it's totally against the environment and not a right step.
Although
 both sides have their own
perspective but
Accept comma addition
perspective, but
house
Suggestion
a house
the house
houses
 can be
constratuced
make by combining materials and parts
constructed
 with some guidelines and without temperament
of
Suggestion
by
 nature.
Firstly
,
Accept space
,
as it can be seen in cities that population increased
rapdialy
with rapid movements
rapidly
 and their
first
 need is
house
Suggestion
housed
 to cover their heads
,
Accept space
,
but, condition of cities already merciful there's no places
avaible
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
 for new building and cities look like
jungle
Suggestion
a jungle
 of concrete
,
Accept space
,
and many people have to sleep under the light of stars.Sometime they had to repay
this
 with their life because many
accident
Suggestion
accidents
 occurred outside while people are sleeping on roads. Admittedly
,
Accept space
,
it has certain drawbacks to construct houses in
remote
Suggestion
remote areas, but
remote areas but
a remote area but
area
 but it has become a thick need of time, which
,
Accept space
,
can not be
fullfield
completed to perfection
fulfilled
 without uses of
this
area
.
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