Some people use social media to keep in touch with other people and news events. Do you think advantages of this technology outweigh the disadvantages?
It is considered by some that social networking sites help
people
to get in contact with each other Use synonyms
as well as
with the news. In my opinion, I think social Linking Words
media
can bring about more problems for Use synonyms
people
compared to any advantages it might bring.
Admittedly, there are some benefits to the Use synonyms
people
from using social networking platforms. Use synonyms
Firstly
, it helps Linking Words
people
to be in contact who Use synonyms
stays
far away, especially, Verb problem
live
someone
who lives in another country or who Use synonyms
are
not able to meet each other very frequently, can talk with each other through any social Correct subject-verb agreement
is
media
platform. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, there Linking Words
is
some relatives or close Correct subject-verb agreement
are
friend
who are not able to attend special one’s celebrations or events physically, Fix the agreement mistake
friends
can
be present virtually, Correct word choice
and can
for example
, Linking Words
video
call. Change preposition
via video
Secondly
, social Linking Words
media
helps Use synonyms
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
to read news from all around the world from anywhere. Use synonyms
In other words
, some Linking Words
people
who are not able to get enough time to read the newspaperUse synonyms
,
can use Remove the comma
apply
this
platform for reading news anytime they are free.
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Nevertheless
, despite the advantages above, I believe Linking Words
people
could face serious drawbacks from social Use synonyms
media
. One potentially dangerous is cyber bullying which is increasing, particularly, in teenagers. Use synonyms
In other words
, some Linking Words
people
imitate Use synonyms
someone
else or victims’ Use synonyms
friend
and trick them into getting all the information about them or Fix the agreement mistake
friends
someone
else as much as possible. Use synonyms
This
information is Linking Words
then
used Linking Words
for harassing
the victim and Change preposition
to harass
taking
money from them, Wrong verb form
take
moreover
, there are some weak Linking Words
people
who are not able to handle Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
,
Correct word choice
and, consequently
consequently
, commit suicide. Another obvious issue is that Linking Words
someone
can misuse the Use synonyms
photo
which are posted on an individual’s account. Fix the agreement mistake
photos
This
can again result in harassment or exposing those pictures after editing them, as there Linking Words
is
various editing Correct subject-verb agreement
are
platform
available for free nowadays.
In conclusion, misusing Fix the agreement mistake
platforms
someone
’s private information and harassing Use synonyms
people
far outweighs any of the minor benefits that could result from social Use synonyms
media
.Use synonyms
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task response
Ensure to fully address the prompt by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of social media. Include more specific examples to support your points.
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