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Are electric cars a replacement for those powered by fossil fuels?

#cars #replacement #fuels
Twenty years ago, if you went to
university
 in the UK, all of your tuition fees were paid for by the government. Now,
however
, you have to pay for them yourself. There is currently a lot of debate about which of these two situations is better. What is more, there are no straightforward answers. In an ideal world, all education would be free, including tertiary education.
Nevertheless
, the fact of the matter is that we do not live in an ideal world and there is not an unlimited supply of money.
In addition
 to
this
, the more money the government spends, the more it taxes its citizens, and the less money they have.
On the other hand
, it could be argued that in a modern democratic society, citizens have some basic rights.
For example
, many people would agree that universal free healthcare is a basic right: no one should go without medical attention because they can’t afford it.
Likewise
, a significant number of people
also
 think
university
 fees should be free of charge. After all, they maintain, if healthcare is free, why shouldn’t
university
 be free, too? In my own view,
university
 tuition fees should not be totally free. If they are, many people will go to
university
 just because they don’t know what to do after secondary school. Obviously,
this
 is not the purpose of going to
university
. At the same time, fees should not be so expensive that they put off people from poor families from carrying on with their studies.
Consequently
, the best solution would be for the government to subsidise tuition fees, but not to pay for them entirely.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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