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It is important for children to learn how to distinguish between right and wrong by carrying out punishments you agree or disagree with this ?

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The early years of life are most essential years for any individual to learn the basic difference between what is
honorable
not disposed to cheat or defraud; not deceptive or fraudulent
honourable
 and wrong. Children have to be taught sometimes by giving torture, when they are unjust. In my opinion it is right to give discipline to children if they are doing wrong.
Firstly
, punishments are an imperative tool by which children are trained to distinguish between what is appropriate and wrong. Parents should motivate their children by giving him praise when he is doing something good. Contrary to
this
 if a child's behaviour is unacceptable and he is not following the advise with love and care than it is not wrong to give discipline. To make a responsible and civilized person of society, parents can punish their children because after all they are the ones who are really sincere to their children.
For instance
, my nephew used to beat his classmates, but after his mother had scolded him and banned his favourite video game, overtime he realised he was doing wrong and rectified his mistake. Only the non physical types of punishments should be carried out by teachers and parents to discipline children. Parents should scold them and take away their mobile phones, video games etc. In case they are not acting morally. Teachers can give extra homework to those who behave immorally, and asking them to make a public apology,
thus
 making them aware of the consequences of breaking school rules. The extreme physical form of abuse should be totally banned as it leaves a negative psychological impact on children and can cause depression. To conclude, children learn to distinguish between what is good and wrong with the help of
trial but
Accept comma addition
trial, but
 not all disciplines can be taught by
this
 method. Physical punishments should not be carried out as they have adverse impacts on a child's mindset.
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