The maps below show that the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show that the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
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The following maps demonstrate the
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center
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centre
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of a small
town
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named Islip as it is now, and
although
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plan for
it's
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its
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further
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refurbishment. The information is concise and coherent. It is crystal clear that plan
of
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for
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Islip
Town
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Center
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consist
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consists
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various
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of various
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changes
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.
Currently
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there
are
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is
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more
number of
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apply
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shops in
countryside
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the countryside
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and
opposite
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the opposite
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of it
near
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to housing. There is a big
park
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on the South-East
side
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of the map which
further
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changes
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to a small
park
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. On the East-
side
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there is a small school which
further
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remains
same
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the same
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on
south-west
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the south-west
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side
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of
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apply
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with a little bit
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changes
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of changes
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. A huge development in the shape of
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town
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the town
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, previously in the down there is only one main
raod
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road
in between shops, which
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seems to be changed in
pedestrian
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a pedestrian
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way only.
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Moreover
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a great dual carriageway is planned around
town
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in circular shape with two
path
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on
West
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the West
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and East
side
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respectively.
In
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On
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the map
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map
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,map
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many progressions can be seen like bus stations ,shopping
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center
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centers
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, car
park
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etcetera. One new housing is
also
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on
map
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the map
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on North East
side
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which joins with
dual
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a dual
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carriageway. There are some
changes
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in the position of housing even one new housing is
plan
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planned
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near
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park
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the park
a park
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.
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,
a
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apply
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great development
changes
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are there with
new
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a new
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dual carriageway bus station, shopping
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center
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centre
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and
carpak
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carpal
car park
also
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. The entire
town
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is now circular in shape.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, further".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words center, town, changes, park, side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 6 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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