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Some people say that we can see films on our phones or tablet there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed films need to be seen in a cinema.

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Although
 some people argue that a blockbuster can be enjoyed in electronic devices
such
 as a smartphone or tablets, many of them opine that it gives more satisfaction visiting cinema hall to watch movies. In my opinion, I think going to the cinema allows us to have exciting experience in a cinematic environment. On the one hand, many persons believe that watching movies in handheld gadgets is quite easy because of busy scheduling of life and more cost effective than physical visit. A movie lover can search for interesting movies on YouTube or other sources or either can
buya
Suggestion
buy a
 subscription to movie selling site,
such
 as Netflix, which can save
time
 and money at a
time
 because it is really hard to travel in traffic congestion. On the other hands, a movie freak individual can enjoy a film at the Cineplex for being entertained more than at home and I agree. Watching movies not only give us a drama or action or thrill, but
also
 provides a cinematic experience of a wonderful visualization through 3D screen, great situational sound effects, soothing environments and attractive delicious snacks and drinks with amazing matinee fans at the same
time
. Though, persons have busy in life, having
time
 constraints, entertainment is needed for relaxation and
such
 filmy atmosphere can sit us to relieve stress of life. To conclude, while many of them differ in their opinion, I think, a person can have the true amusement by watching movies at the hall rather preferring small devices
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