Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that, prisoners should involved in to volunteer services in the community rather than keep them in the behind of the bars.
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statement is no exception and has its own advantages and disadvantages.
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, following essay will elaborate my viewpoints in detail and reach to a conclusion. In order to justify my viewpoint, it can be said that it is highly beneficial when prisoners are engaged with the community services. It will allow them to provide better service for the society development rather than keep their self's in the prison.
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will encourage them to be more involved, focused and eventually will help to develop positive behaviour of them. Other than
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, violence, aggressiveness, impatience and other negative attitudes can be minimized by participating social work. Social working help them to shine their personality and it can be a great example of being supporting into good deeds.
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it can be said, prisoners will able learn discipline better and will able to become more aware to be self control themselves rather than put them into the bars. When prisoners are involved into bad habits they personally becoming more stressful to the society.
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