The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how aluminium
cans
are recycled. The process consists of many steps(7?), starting from the collection and
finishig
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finishing
(ending?) with a new recycled product. Thanks to
this
cycle, the UK is able to reintroduce
around
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the? 74% of the old wasted
cans
.
Firstly
, the used
cans
are thrown into specific containers and
then
collected by a recycling company and brought
in
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their factories, ready to initiate the recycling (rep) procedures.
Secondly
, those
cans
, after being cleaned and sorted, are shredded and compacted into blocks. In the following step, those aluminium blocks are melted at very high temperatures and, once the metal is become pliable, (they are)
disposed
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/introduced
?
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.
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on/into special machines that transform them into 2.5 to 6mm thick rolls.
Finally
, the rolls are used to create brand new
cans
, ready to be sold to beverage companies, filled and reintroduced in the market. The whole cycle
it
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then
repeated.
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