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As we are facing more and more problems which affect the whole planet, good relationships between different countries are becoming more important than ever before. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In a modern world, each
country
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 has been coping with a massive number of issues
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 as poverty, environmental problems, terrorism,
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, it requires international cooperation to alleviate these.
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, I am of the strong opinion that connection among countries plays a crucial role than ever before.
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 of all, solidarity among nations is the only key to tackle global problems. It is irrefutable that developed countries have been aiding poor countries in many aspects
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 as health, education, infrastructure. Take,
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, Vietnam, a
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 receiving international aids,
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 from Japan. Thanks to their supports, Vietnam transformed from one of the poorest nations into a middle-income
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 with updating infrastructure with more skyscrapers, improving health as well as education systems, leading to a higher standard of living. Another important role of tight relations among nations lies in their mutual support to overcome global warming. In fact, environment-protecting problems are more urgent than ever before around the world. The only solution to deal with these is to work hands on hands and build positive relationships so that each
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 could learn from other nations' experiences
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 as using renewable energy efficiently, methods to raise environmental consciousness, helping mitigate the ecological footprint and the depletion of fossil fuels.
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, fostering positive relations would be vitally important to maintain peace around the world.
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 is because governments provide security information, helping build an overall system to deter terrorist attacks. In conclusion, I am strongly convinced that nations worldwide should support mutually for their own survival and the whole planet's survival.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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