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Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a “fat tax” is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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It is generally agreed that implementing crispy and fatty
food
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 or salty snacks in our diet can cause serious problems related to our health. Despite many people think it may be a convenient way of eating, I believe these taxes could have a beneficial role because should be a deterrent to eat junk
food
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, it has often been suggested that different categories of population can suffer according to the age.
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, children and teenagers are at particular risk of obesity because they spend a lot of time alone, they like playing
videogames
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video games
 rather than doing physical activity. Adults and elderly people, who have eaten unhealthily for many years, possibly due to their low income or lack of education, may suffer from chronicle diseases and even mortal illnesses like heart attacks and strokes, high cardiovascular
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, in Italy recent evidence has shown that illnesses linked to unhealthy diet have increased dramatically especially among
young
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the young
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Secondly it
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Secondly, it
 is generally agreed that obesity is quite
widespread especially
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widespread, especially
 in well developed countries like the US due to the lack of good habits about alimentation. As a consequence the society has to deal with many medical expenses as many individuals need, in
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 case, to be hospitalized.
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 “fat tax” or additional prices imposed to sugary drinks can lead to disadvantages for owners of extremely low household income or poor classes who cannot afford to buy expensive
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. Because it could be difficult to select which items could be better to tax among high sugar content soft drinks, snacks, chips and fried
food
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, it has always been suggested that the choice could discourage the purchase of the items preferred by children
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 as chocolate or snacks. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
 strongly support the idea of taxing unhealthy
food
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 because the spread of obesity and related illnesses hit both individuals and the society ending up to high medical costs.
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 the government should find a compromise in order to implement
taxes affordable
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taxes, affordable
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 by
poor
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the poor
 who are keen to have an incorrect alimentation.
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