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currently many people fail to balance the work with the other parts of lives, what are the reasons and how to solve it?

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In today's scenario task activity balance is the major issue for many people. There are a number of reasons behind it, below essay will elaborate more
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 the reasons and solutions to solve it.
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 with, one of the reasons is luxurious
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 and people are ready to
work
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 extra to achieve it. Some people are bound to
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 due to peer pressure, to meet project deadlines and to get extra wages so they can fulfil their dreams. Another major reason could be globalized as everyone has to match with global timings to attend cross border meetings.
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, sometimes there is a competition between peers to get a promotion, so they do
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 for an extra hour.
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, people tend to forget to spend the quality time with the family. Solution to above problem is to balance it.
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 can be divided
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 shifts and strict rules can be set up for the employees who stays in office after office hours. Every individual has to think about spending time with their children, it can be a weekend movie or taking them into a play area. Planning family dinner as well as get together with friends can be a good option to make a balance between
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 and
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. To sum up, problems can be unsolved if a person never tries to manage it than solving it because every problem and its solution lies in every individual but it is just how we tackle it. If a person starts thinking that money is for the
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 and not vice versa, it can make
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 easy.
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