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what is homelessness? what are the reasons for the homeless people

Homeless people The term 'homeless' refers to the people who lost their homes, whatever the reason was. Most people become homeless due to the bad gathering of friends. Some lost their homes because of lost their job or due to lost of everything in gamble whether their home, assets and even wife as well. Homeless people's lifestyles
varies
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vary
country
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 to
country
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. In poor countries they do rigorous struggle to get food as compared to rich countries. I've seen many homeless people who
depends
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depend
 on
government
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 shelters
also
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 they start begging to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their will of drugs. Developed countries provide them food for
entire month
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an entire month
the entire month
 along with some cash on
monthly basis
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a monthly basis
 in order to control robbery and unemployment.
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, homeless people directly impacts on
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country's
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the country's economy
a country's economy
economy
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. As they do not work for their livelihood and
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 do not contribute
in
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to
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government's
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the government's economy
economy
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 even they live in
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country but
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the country, but
the country but
a country but
 not include in the
country
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's official counting of
population
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the population
. That's how they
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 free from paying taxes.
Government
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 make
plans according
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plans, according
 to registered
data but
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data, but
 plans get
disturb
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disturbed
 due to these
type
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types
 of people. Apart from
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, robberies
are
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also increase
have also increased
are also increasing
are also increased
also
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 increase because if they yearn for drugs they do illicit acts. On the whole,
government
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 should prepare a proper plan for homeless people and emphasis them to do some kind of work to afford their selves. That's how
country
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's
economy
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 can rise and unemployment
get
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gets
 lessens. If
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government
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the government
 doesn't do the same, they will be harmful for
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economy
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the economy
 and the peace of the
country
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.

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