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The table below shows the results of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the results of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows the change in attitude, over ten years, of students at McGill University to different aspects of its academic provision.
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, the most striking set of statistics relates to approval for student services. There was a sharp increase in the number of students giving these services a good rating, particularly in the first five years: from 54
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 in 2010, and 95
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 in 2015. There was
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 improvement in ratings for teaching quality, though the increase was relatively small (74
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 in 2005 rising to 78
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 in 2015) and there was a decline in the interim (72
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 in 2010). There was
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 a fluctuation in attitudes to library resources, rising from 86
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 in the first five years and
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 in 2015. Good ratings for the university’s sports and social facilities were identical throughout, at 65
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, there were poor ratings at the beginning of the period in the range of modules offered (39
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 in 2015.
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