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Film is a less important form of art than literature and painting. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is irrefutable that different aspects of an art plays a pivotal role in youngster’s life. Some people believe that the film is the main form of craft. Whereas others opine that Literature and Painting is an important element of an art. Through
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 essay I will cast light to highlight the importance of film and how it is helping to human beings. There are myriad things to be shared in the
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 statement. Films are visually represented and everyone can understand it so easily. Nowadays, many of the kids are spending
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lots
 of time by watching the videos and even it helps them to learn lots of new things. Some of the films have moral messages and it reminds us the responsibility of our society.
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, there is a famous director in south
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
 named Koratala Siva, he always gives messages to the society through his movies.
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, literature and painting are part of an art. People cannot understand the theme of any
paint
a geometric element that has position but no extension
point
 if they do not have the basic knowledge. Many of us gain
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a lot
 of knowledge through books, but these days we do not have enough time to read
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 many books.
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, earlier people are interested to watch the test cricket matches. But now,
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the majority
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are preferring
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 to watch the twenty twenty matches. With the busy schedules everyone prefers to know the result very quickly. Films will finish in 2 hours were to read a book need
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 of time. To put in a nutshell, having looked the advantages and counter arguments. In my opinion, films are more important than literature and painting. I will recommend film directors to direct mobiles which have the reality
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 of violence.
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