The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows the average
of
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the
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number of vehicles that pass in the city centre per day from 1996 to 2005 and
also
differentiate
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the
journeys
made by
residents
and non-
residents
. It can clearly see that in the first years,
residents
'
vehicle
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vehicles
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dominate
this
kind of traffic, in 1996
non-
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residents
'
vehicle
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vehicles
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is almost half of the other
one
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, 5000 versus 10000, and
this
supremacy continues until 1999, with a slight increase
of
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the
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number of non-
residents
journeys
, that reach the peak value of 8500. After 2000, with the
introducing
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of parking meters in the city centre, it can be seen as a change of trend, in these years and in the
next
years, we see a rapid decrease
of
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residents
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residents'
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journeys
, with only a little increase in 2002. The
non
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non-residents
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residents
ones
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have a stable average, of about 8000, in the three year period, between 2000 to 2002, and
then
also
fall down to a value of 3000
journeys
per day, cause of the closure of traffic on Westgate Street and Park Lane.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words journeys, residents with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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