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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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the momentary state of the bookstore. As can be seen, outstanding change has been done
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 the fiction section.
As a result
, it lost its most area in the bookstore
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 and shares the same dimension with, the new book sector at the moment.
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, now art, hobbies, and cookery sections increased
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 spot and moved to the
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 fictions spot now.
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their previous space accounted for 3 tables now.
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 the library using the imagination zone previously.
Besides
, by providing its area with a large cafe store. Surprisingly, in a decade, there was no single action taken in travel, the new book, a service desk, and entrance areas. In conclusion, the substantial change in the decade was giving the most slot of myth room to the smaller book genre sections
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. It seems fantasy became more real nowadays
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people started
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interesting
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 in more real and natural ways of reading.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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