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Today, most people get married and give birth in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Is it a positive or negative development in your opinion? To what extent do you support this development?

#people #birth #thirties #development #support
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Nowadays, a healthy proportion of individuals tend to marry and have children when they are around their thirties when juxtaposed with younger ages. In my opinion,
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 is a positive trend, as it provides people a chance to start their independent
life
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 with confidence before having a family
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, I support the above mentioned development. Undeniably, marriage
age
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have risen
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has risen
 in our day and
age
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.
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 is mainly because, the most people want to choose their own path in
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before they marry to
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before they marry
 someone. To be precise,
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 people spend their time on education, personal development and choosing a career in their younger
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 of making a new family, I think. In our financially-demanding world, without acquiring proper knowledge and possessing a job, making ends meet has become more difficult
Jeven
acknowledged as a supposition
given
 for a person So, people who have realized
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 fact, opt
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to
 marry and give birth later on in
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. From my perspective, marrying around the
age
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 of thirty for the sake of having a permanent workplace and choosing a
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the time after sunset and before sunrise while it is dark outside
night
 path in
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,
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, is
positive trend
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a positive trend
.
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, I support the development of making a family later on, as
relationship
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the relationship
 between family members only in
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 families can be prolonged. Precisely after the
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 of thirty people can understand the real meanıng of
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 and their
family which
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family, which
 can lead to increase in numbers of happy family in society Because, most of people who
marmed
feel sadness
mourned
moaned
murmured
 at their younger
age
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 are likely to get divorced, as
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 people tend to consider
life
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 as
life
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 in the novels
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example according
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example, according
 to the findings of Demographic Agency at the United States
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 year far more people married at around thirties have lead a successful families when compared with younger ones. In
conclusionI
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conclusion, I
conclusion I
 am in favour of
marriyng
take in marriage
marrying
 and having children at around
thirties
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the thirties
.
as
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As
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 may lead to making stronger and happier family, at all
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,
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 is something positive thing for me
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