The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The charts show the aspects that tourists like the most and the least by visiting Bowen Island. It can be seen that half of the visitors shared a disappointment
for
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the high cost of living, a quarter of them don't like the entertainment offered on the island, the
last
quarter of
tourist
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tourists
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dislike
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disliked
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weather
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the weather
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and food quality, respectively 15 and 10
percent
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of people. On the other
side
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the most liked advantage is the people, in fact, 42% of tourist like it, but 35% of them
also
appreciate the scenery, the least shared advantage is good accommodation, with 11
percent
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, and it is probably linked to the disadvantages showed by the tourist. In
general
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we see that in Bowen Island, the most liked aspect is connected to the ambient and the people that live in it, but it's clear that
the
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apply
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tourism in
this
place lacks
of
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a good system of tourism management
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • According to the survey
  • Visitors reported
  • The pie charts show
  • The most common advantages/disadvantages
  • A significant proportion
  • A small percentage
  • In contrast
  • Notably
  • The largest segment
  • Similarly
  • On the other hand
  • A major advantage/disadvantage
  • To highlight
  • Overall effect
  • Impact the experience
  • In summary
  • Illustrates
  • Reflects
  • Highlights
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